Monday, October 24, 2005

Fast Fiction 2 - No Moaning No More

Title: No Moaning No More
Challenger: Bert
Length: Exactly 200 words

Blind Berry Jackson made it to the sink just in time to spit out another chunk of blackened lung meat. He knew that he didn’t have much longer.

The needle crackled and popped as he dropped it onto the 45 of his decades-old hit “No Moaning No More”, creaking out of the tinny speaker he had propped up next to his cot.

Jackson collapsed back onto the worn mattress, and felt the tired bedsprings poking at his skeletal flesh. A painful cough ripped through him, as memories of years on the Chitlin Circuit erupted on the back of his eyelids.

The white girls used to sneak in the back door to hear him playing those run-down ol’ dives, hypnotised by his delicate fretwork, his gnarled fingers shimmying across the guitar. He used to fix them with his one good eye, and his rumbling voice would ooze out. “Know what they say? Darker the Berry, Sweeter the Juice.” They would melt when they heard that.

In a moment of perfect synchronicity, the needle skated off the end of the record just in time to catch the last breath rattling out of his body and into the fusty air of the room.

4 comments:

Shh! Bert at Work said...

Cheery

b rossroads said...

He paints quite a picture, doesn't he?

Very vivid and charmingly brief. More! cry the cheap seats.

AKA said...

I would gladly do more...but no-one else is taking up the challenge...I'll give it a couple more days to see if anyone else wants to throw down the gauntlet before I abandon this little experiment.

Ya hear me, people? Challenge me!!

AKA said...

By the way, due to excessive amounts of commentspam, and the fact that I just had to waste half an hour going through the entire blog deleting commentspam, I've had to introduce "Word Verification" on the commenting system. Hope this results in the Painful Death of All Spammers!